Wednesday, March 13, 2013

Bird's Mistake



Little bird fluttered outside the window while I sat in my rickety recliner watching the clouds gather. Suddenly the bird crashed into the pane and thumped on to the sill.

I stretched and picked it up carefully. Bird blinked at me. My heart swelled and I hugged it tight. It suffocated.

It’s stupid bird’s mistake.

(This story is written for 3WW. First time 55 words. I guess I do 100 words better. But hey, how would I know if I don't try)

12 comments:

Altonian said...

Nice bit of black humour, a bit heavy-handed, if you'll pardon the pun.

Pratyush said...

@Altonian - Thank you! Heavy handed indeed. I had stated with "if I smothered you with love, who made the mistake" :)

Sheilagh Lee said...

this reminds me of Elmyra Duff from the Tiny Loonie tunes, she used to say "I'm gonna hug you and kiss you and love you forever [and never use you up."
Well written

Old Egg said...

Our instinct to save them is often too much.

TCPC said...

dark humour! and crisp!! so much for micro fiction! :)

Pratyush said...

@Sheilagh - I just try, because it's so much fun :). Thank You!

Pratyush said...

@oldegg - can i handle your love? oh yeah! i think i can. thank you for your comment!!

Pratyush said...

@Akila - i was going through your blog the other day. none failed to touch and some actually scared me, if you know what i mean. if you say dark, i will take it.
thanks for your comment!!

christopher said...

Reach toward the black sky and find the maelstrom.

LLM Calling said...

oh no, that's too sad

Unknown said...

next time save one!!

Pratyush said...

@Emma- isn't it :-(
@Singh Saheb- we try.